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[subtle]

Hi. This is my first post here though I'm fairly vocal on some other boards. I've had stories posted in bdsmlibrary since 2002 but would appreciate some honest feedback on the most recent one I've published (Communications Skills IV: Lip Service) since it took me about two years to get inspired enough to write it, and it's venturing into some areas I have less experience with.

Any feedback would be greatly appreciated

subtle

[Lord Douche]

Welcome to the forum, Subtle! I haven't read your story yet, but you've got a 10/10 review already, so it can't be too bad! Perhaps head over to the New Members thread and introduce yourself

Well, not sure what I should say It's a good story. A few little glitches that a good proof-reading would fix with no trouble. But all in all, very well written, and very hot
LD

[petleah]

i located your story and i'm quite pleased with your Lip Service! i admit i didn't read the first three chapters but i find that it stands well on its own and i feel it has potential to continue onwards to a fifth and possibly tenth chapter if you'd like to take it that far.
From now on i will keep my eyes open for your new works as i find i definitely enjoy your style of clear, concise, and imaginative writing style! i like your way of leaving enough to the imagination so that it's not stranded in left field while trying to picture what's happening and so that it doesn't know every smallest detail and no wiggle room.
Happy Holidays and New Year, keep up the great work!

[Chuckdom19]

Dear subtle,
you have just given a deep experience, reading the first of your stories I have, I think. Your talent and focus on expressing feelings and emotions here earn you a twenty-one gun salute in my eyes.
I will shortly begin reading everything you have posted, starting with the trilogy this was sequel to, but you deserve all the feedback I may give.
Usually I harp (a little ) on editorial errors, and there were only one or two in this one. But due to the quality of the story, those fade to nothingness.
Please, please continue writing. Your skills deserve appreciating by a wide audience.
I write fun little stuff in Lord Mobius' Dungeon; I am not worthy to stand in your shadow, Ma'am.

chksng19

[RhondaLee]

why don't you put all 4 stories in 1 long story? Each story is too short, don't you think?