Okay, here goes. I preface all the following remarks with... Rabbit saw it first and said to post it.
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It's over 85 chapters. I haven't finished it yet. LOL

But... my first impressions are as follows.

It sets a scene of modern society but old technology. No set up as to how or why people have chosen to live this way... other than an excuse to write a story about ponygirls (at least initially.)

It's one thing to be brief in a short story, maybe even for a novella... but if you intend to write 85+ chapters, spend a little time setting up the scene.

It jumps to action almost immediately. No suspense, no sense of impending peril. In fact, any opportunity for suspense was thrown right out the window... We know exactly that the blond ponygirl that looks like Andrea had was Andrea's predessesor, so we know exactly what is about to happen to Andrea.

Andrea's stated reason for toying with the ponygirls is to cause them pleasure and the ponygirls expect it. I'm already becoming bored.

Andrea, captured before the first chapter is half over. A new cast of characters to figure out. A lot of slapping.

The cliffhanger? "Let the games begin." Yawn.

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Sorry, I don't see what warrants 400,000+ visits... save the large number of chapters. And frankly, for as long ago as it was started, that's not really all that much.

Stories submitted just yesterday already have 1300 to 4000+ visitors. A far higher daily average.

Chapter 2 had a lot of symmetry:

"Position." Whop! "Position!" Whop! "Position." Whop!
"Position." Whop! "Position!" Whop! "Position." Whop!
"Position." Whop! "Position!" Whop! "Position." Whop!
"Position." Whop! "Position!" Whop! "Position." Whop!

I skipped around a bit. I know it's meant to be an F/f+ story.... but where are the men? Not even one I've found in any capacity.

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I can be a supportive critic... but this one... I can't understand the rave reviews.