Non Erotic Writing

[ElectricBadger]

Back -- and actually not too much to say on the last bit, I absolutely loved the line:

The light seemed to concentrate itself around her, casting the rest of the room into shadows.

Combined with the earlier mention of fairy faces it gives the reader a little doubt as to whether there really is magic at work -- which could be fun to play with as a story element, or just to let be as it is.

I like the plan, too. Very scheming and grandiose! I think it's important to give some more information about their history -- how they ended up as three outcast women here -- but I don't think that's needed (or even good) in the intro, just an element to include later.

Again, really really nice...half conspiracy, half fairy tale...I likes it!

[moptop]

Back -- and actually not too much to say on the last bit, I absolutely loved the line: Combined with the earlier mention of fairy faces it gives the reader a little doubt as to whether there really is magic at work -- which could be fun to play with as a story element, or just to let be as it is.

I like the plan, too. Very scheming and grandiose! I think it's important to give some more information about their history -- how they ended up as three outcast women here -- but I don't think that's needed (or even good) in the intro, just an element to include later.

Again, really really nice...half conspiracy, half fairy tale...I likes it!

I've only just seen this, Badger, sorry, or I would have responded sooner. Thanks, this is encouraging and very useful. I shall have to think about their history, yes - I havn't made it up yet! but I have a vague plan. I hope to play a little more with the magic, too - not quite sure how far, perhaps I'll take your pointer and just leave always that little bit in doubt... I like that!

Sadly little interest in the sticky, though... and I did think the three ladies would also whet some other interests! Chrysalis is going to be a formidable creature (one day).